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this is the teacher comments

can you fix it for me and add 3 mores pages, references and what ever the teacher ask.

This is a good draft and you may continue working on your final paper but you will need to go into much greater depth. Your material can also be organized better; break the text in thematic sections, each with a separate heading. There is no point to have a “Literature Review” section; the whole paper is a literature review. Include an abstract in final paper. First page of the text, and several other paragraphs, did not contain any references; back up your points with evidence. Journal names should appear in italics in the references.