She gave the paper an 85% The teacher said to revise it and resubmit. Some suggestions she made and also the first download is the paper that was handed in the the second download is the actual paper with a more specific things that need to be addressed.

Thesis Statement: Please make sure that your thesis statement is one complete sentence that introduces your topic and gives an overview of the main points of your essay. You also need to make sure that your thesis concludes your introductory paragraph
Body Paragraphs: Your thesis statement is the purpose for your essay. Everything you say in the body of your essay should support what you say in your thesis. If your body paragraphs don’t match your thesis, don’t be afraid to revise your thesis!
Information/Support: This is a good start! Remember that the body of your essay should be a combination of summarized/paraphrased information from research and your own ideas and observations about the topic. Don’t fill your paper with quoted material, it should be no more than 10% of your essay.
Citations: You’re off to a good start! Make sure that your essay isn’t more than 10% quoted material, and remember your in-text citations should not be distracting and should lead your audience back to your works cited page

In this Assignment, you will research career options using electronic libraries/databases, then write about your
chosen career.
This Assignment will assess your knowledge based on the following outcomes:
GEL-1.2: Demonstrate college-level communication through the composition of original materials in Standard
English.
GEL-6.5: Use electronic libraries/databases for research purposes.
There are numerous career options available to business and finance graduates. You can begin careers in
government, the non-profit sector, corporate finance, banking, investments and wealth management, education
and other fields. However, it is useful to know the expected salaries and the projected job demand for a
particular skill set prior to spending years acquiring the expertise to work in that field.
One of the ways you can learn more about a particular career is to research that career using various
resources. For assistance in your search you can use the Library and the Center for Excellence in Financial
Services to assist in your expository paper. Then using various resources write a one- two page paper
regarding your chosen career including:
1. The job description
2. Explanation of the skill set needed to perform the job
3. The demand for the job
4. Salary projections for the chosen career field
5. Explain how your current qualifications match up to the skills needed
6. Explain the websites you have visited and what you learned from each
7. Cite at least 3 search references using APA 6
th edition formatting
Assignment Checklist:
● Write your original response in Standard English, paying special attention to grammar, style, and
mechanics.
● Respond to each area in a thorough manner, providing specific facts and figures and matching your skills to
the qualifications needed.
● Ensure that your all information is clearly stated and cited.
● Demonstrate logical and appropriate transitions from one idea to another.
● Your paper should be highly organized, logical, and focused and demonstrate original thought.
● Your paper should be a minimum of 1-2 pages.
● Make sure you write and cite your work and reference all materials used for your research using APA
format.
● Make sure to address the critical elements listed above and in the grading Rubric below to demonstrate
your competence of the outcome you are being assessed on.

Create a communication strategy that fosters change and innovation in an
organization. Explain the context in which it occurs and the options that are
available. Develop a solution that will solve the organizational issue and meet
the needs of the people involved.

Feel free to use the same
organization you researched for the Unit VI and Unit VII assignments. You are
not limited to this organization, but it may be easier to complete the
assignment since you have already researched it for Unit VI and/or Unit VII.
You can use the same sources for all assignments, if applicable.

In the report, you will provide
a potential audience analysis, create a purposeful message, and discuss a type
of channel that you could use for feedback. Include answers to Neal’s (2010)
communication questions, which are listed below:

1.
What am I trying to achieve?

2.
How will my audience react to what I am trying to achieve?

3.
Will my message be resisted?

4. What do I know about my
audience that will help me tailor my message?

Do not include the
question/answers in a bullet or list format. Instead, integrate the responses
in your paragraphs.

Use the standard five-paragraph
format (introduction/body/conclusion). Include at least two academic sources.
APA format should be used. The assignment should be a minimum of two pages in
length. Content, organization, and grammar/mechanics will be evaluated.

Sample Attached